IELTS Writing Section: Academic Task 1

Here are some sentences using synonyms to describe a graph: 1. The graph portrays... 2. The chart exemplifies... 3. The data in the graph discloses... 4. The visual representation showcases... 5. The figures in the chart symbolize... 6. According to the graph...

**Describing figures** * Mathematical Terms: * Doubled * Halved * Tripled * Over a third * Just under a quarter * A little shy of a fifth * One in Three * Importan collocations: * Major change * Particularly few * Relatively small * Significant amount * Considerable reduction * Noun phrase * Sharp increase * Slow rise * Slight decrease * Steady qrowth * Significant drop * Considerable fluctuation * Gradual surge * Dramatical decline * Verb phrase: * Increased sharpy * Rose slowly * Decreased slightly * Grew steadily * Dropped significantly * Fluctuated considerably * Surged gradually * Declined dramatically

The graph indicates the amount of men and women in higher education in Britain in several intervals of time, the chart also indicates whether they were fully dedicated to studying or they studied partial time. In general, the visual representation showcases a steady and constant increase of women, specifically in part-time education, throughout the last three decades of the 21st century. From 1970 to 1980 there was a significant rise in the amount of women studying full time, just under the double, however this growth slowed down the next decade. Additionally, the men's side of the graph shows an abnormal decrease of the population studying part-time in the decade of 1980 compared to the immediate before. However, the shrink of the male student population was followed by a slight increase at the start of the next decade. In contrast, the amount of men doing full time education has showed a constant increase during the period of the indicated.

COMPARTO EL TEXTO FINAL Y MI PROCESO DE CORRECCION , MUCHAS GRACIAS , VIBRAS \------TEXTO FINAL CORREGIDO --- **THE NUMBER OF MEN AND WOMEN IN FURTHER EDUCATION IN BRITAIN** According to the graph, there is a notable contrast in the levels of further education between men and women over the decades, specifically from 1970 to 1991. Firstly, the male group shows an interesting fluctuating trend over time, influenced by factors like work, family, and whether the education is full-time or part-time. For instance, part-time education for men decreased from one million in 1970-1971 to approximately eight hundred thousand over the next two decades, from 1980-1981 to 1990-1991. On the other hand, full-time education has shown a gradual increase, though it remains at fewer than four hundred thousand students. Secondly, the data on the female group also provides insights for careful analysis. Reviewing the statistics for part-time further education among women, we can observe an increase from about eight hundred thousand students in 1970-1971 to around one million two hundred thousand. In conclusion, according to the graph, full-time education has grown in both groups from the 1970s to the 1990s, but part-time education has seen a more significant increase among women compared to men. --------------------- TEXTOORIGINAL SIN CORRECCIONES  CORRECCIONES * **Título y Corrección de Artículos y Conjugaciones:*** **Original:** "According the graph" * **Corregido:** "According to the graph" * **Explicación:** Falta la preposición "to" después de "according," ya que la frase correcta en inglés es "according to." * **Claridad y Reestructuración de la Introducción:*** **Original:** "...there is a great contrasting information relatively to know the difference is further education between men and women through the decades..." * **Corregido:** "...there is a notable contrast in the levels of further education between men and women over the decades..." * **Explicación:** La redacción original es confusa. Se reformuló para mejorar la claridad y precisión. "Great contrasting information" fue cambiado a "a notable contrast," ya que la idea es contrastar las diferencias, no enfatizar una cantidad de información. Además, "relatively to know the difference" es una frase poco clara y no se usa en inglés. * **Detalles Cronológicos y Tiempos Verbales:*** **Original:** "In first place the male group had an interesting castrating development through the time..." * **Corregido:** "Firstly, the male group shows an interesting fluctuating trend over time..." * **Explicación:** El término "castrating development" no tiene sentido en este contexto y se reemplazó por "fluctuating trend," que describe adecuadamente los cambios en el tiempo. Además, "Firstly" es una expresión más común que "In first place." * **Errores en el Uso de Artículos y Conjunciones:*** **Original:** "by other hand" * **Corregido:** "On the other hand" * **Explicación:** La expresión correcta en inglés es "on the other hand" para contrastar ideas. * **Datos Numéricos y Precisión de Expresión:*** **Original:** "...from one million in 1970-1971 to eight hundred thousand less or more respectively in the next two decades." * **Corregido:** "...from one million in 1970-1971 to approximately eight hundred thousand over the next two decades." * **Explicación:** La frase "less or more respectively" es incorrecta y confusa. Se reemplazó por "approximately" para indicar una cifra aproximada. * **Corrección de Conjugaciones Verbales y Gramática en el Análisis del Grupo Femenino:*** **Original:** "...it had has an increase from eight hundred thousand students..." * **Corregido:** "...we can observe an increase from about eight hundred thousand students..." * **Explicación:** "it had has" es un error gramatical. Se reemplazó con "we can observe," que es más claro y gramaticalmente correcto. * **Claridad en la Conclusión:*** **Original:** "...but the part-time education has had a better increase in the female group than in male’s one." * **Corregido:** "...but part-time education has seen a more significant increase among women compared to men." * **Explicación:** "Better increase" es incorrecto en inglés; se usó "a more significant increase" para expresar la comparación correctamente. Además, "male’s one" no es correcto y se reemplazó con "men."

The bar graph that is displayed shows the evolution of the amount of men and women in further education thoughout three periods of time, comparing for each period if the education was full-time or part time. As a general overview, we can say that, regardless of the period being considered, the amount of men and women involved in part-time further education is higher than those in the full-time one. If we focus on the gender we can say that for both categories that amount of people involed in education is more or less the same, showing only a difference for the 1970/71 period where the amount of men is slightly higher but attenuating over time. Finally, if we analyse each type of education we can see that full-time education shows a general increasing trend thoughout time for both men and women, whereas part-time education shows an increasing trend only for women.