Escritura de Cartas Formales en Inglés: Consejos y Práctica

**Dear Mr. Emilio Chau,** My name is **Juan Manuel Mamani**, and my address is **456 St. Jean Street, Los Angeles, California**. I am **writing to inform you** that the road **in front of** my house is damaged. The issue with this road is that **my family and I** are **unable** to use our means of transportation, and the safety of other **neighbors** is **at serious risk** because the road **is** full of rocks and holes **near** a cliff where **a river runs through, making it constantly at risk of collapsing**. **Could your local council visit our neighborhood to inspect the road damage and other safety concerns in our community?** For **instance, there are issues with intoxicated individuals, robbery, and prostitution**. I am **confident that if we can address the damaged road, we can also begin to tackle these other problems**. **I look forward to your response** and **collaboration in resolving this matter**. Sincerely, Juan Manuel Mamani \------------------------------------------ TEXTO SIN CORREGIR Dear Sir, Emilio Chau, My name is Juan manuel mamani my address is 456 Street St Jean, Los Angeles, California. In this opportunity I would like to report you that the road in from my house is damaged. The problem with this road is that my family and me cannot be available to use our means of transportation and the safety of the other neighbours is in real risk because the road id full of rocks and holes next to a cliff where the river came across so it is in constant danger to collapse. Your local council can approach to my neighbourhood and check all the damages around the road also other danger community situation around our houses. For example, the drunks, robbery, prostitution, etc. If we can start getting a solution to the road in bad state, I am sure we can combat the rest of problem. I really hope your answer and collaboration in order to solve this situation. Juan Manuel Mamani. CORECCIONES : **Explicaciones de los cambios:** 1\. **Corrección de la Forma de Encabezado Formal:** o **Original:** "Dear Sir, Emilio Chau," o **Corregido:** "Dear Mr. Emilio Chau," o **Explicación:** "Sir" se usa de forma genérica y "Emilio Chau" es un nombre específico, así que se usa "Mr." antes del nombre para un tono formal adecuado. 2\. **Corrección de Estructura y Mayúsculas en Presentación:** o **Original:** "My name is Juan manuel mamani my address is 456 Street St Jean, Los Angeles, California." o **Corregido:** "My name is Juan Manuel Mamani, and my address is 456 St. Jean Street, Los Angeles, California." o **Explicación:** Los nombres propios (como "Juan Manuel Mamani") siempre deben comenzar con mayúsculas. Además, el texto original tenía errores en la estructura de la dirección; "Street" debe ir después del nombre de la calle, y falta un conector entre oraciones, por lo que se agrega "and." 3\. **Claridad y Corrección de Expresiones:** o **Original:** "In this opportunity I would like to report you that the road in from my house is damaged." o **Corregido:** "I am writing to inform you that the road in front of my house is damaged." o **Explicación:** La frase "In this opportunity" no es natural en inglés. Se cambió a "I am writing to inform you," que es la forma correcta de comenzar una carta formal para reportar un problema. Además, "in from" es incorrecto; se corrigió a "in front of." 4\. **Reestructuración de Párrafos y Corrección de Errores Gramaticales:** o **Original:** "...my family and me cannot be available to use our means of transportation..." o **Corregido:** "...my family and I are unable to use our means of transportation..." o **Explicación:** "My family and me" es gramaticalmente incorrecto; debe ser "my family and I" cuando se refiere a los sujetos de la oración. Además, "cannot be available" no tiene sentido aquí; se cambió a "are unable" para mayor claridad. 5\. **Reestructuración de Ideas y Frases Confusas:** o **Original:** "...the road id full of rocks and holes next to a cliff where the river came across so it is in constant danger to collapse." o **Corregido:** "...the road is full of rocks and holes near a cliff where a river runs through, making it constantly at risk of collapsing." o **Explicación:** "id" es un error tipográfico; debe ser "is." La frase "where the river came across" es confusa y se cambió a "where a river runs through" para indicar que el río está cerca. También se cambió "in constant danger to collapse" a "constantly at risk of collapsing" para mayor claridad y precisión. 6\. **Corrección de la Solicitud de Inspección:** o **Original:** "Your local council can approach to my neighbourhood and check all the damages around the road also other danger community situation around our houses." o **Corregido:** "Could your local council visit our neighborhood to inspect the road damage and other safety concerns in our community?" o **Explicación:** La estructura original era gramaticalmente incorrecta y confusa. Se reformuló en forma de solicitud formal (utilizando "Could...") y se simplificó para mayor claridad. 7\. **Errores en la Enumeración de Problemas y Uso de Conectores:** o **Original:** "For example, the drunks, robbery, prostitution, etc. If we can start getting a solution to the road in bad state, I am sure we can combat the rest of problem." o **Corregido:** "For instance, there are issues with intoxicated individuals, robbery, and prostitution. I am confident that if we can address the damaged road, we can also begin to tackle these other problems." o **Explicación:** "The drunks" es informal y poco respetuoso; se cambió a "intoxicated individuals." "Etc." no es necesario y puede ser impreciso, por lo que fue eliminado. Además, "If we can start getting a solution to the road in bad state" se cambió a "if we can address the damaged road," una expresión más clara y precisa. 8\. **Cierre Formal:** o **Original:** "I really hope your answer and collaboration in order to solve this situation." o **Corregido:** "I look forward to your response and collaboration in resolving this matter." o **Explicación:** "I really hope your answer" es demasiado informal para una carta. En su lugar, "I look forward to your response" es más profesional y cortés. Además, "in resolving this matter" es más preciso que "in order to solve this situation."